गजल-११
टल बाली राई
अस्ट्रेलिया
हावा हुण्डरीको वेगसंगै सल्किन्छौ किन?
आशातीत लक्ष्यहरुमा सधैं पल्किन्छौ किन?
प्रायश्चितका रेखाहरुलाई मेट्ने दौडमा
जादुमय स्थिर मुस्कानमा झल्किन्छौ किन?
परिवर्तित भावनामा कताकता रुमलिन
समुन्द्रको छालसरि छल्किन्छौ किन ?
सुसुप्त कोपिलालाई फक्रिन दिने अभियानमा
शीतको किरणझैँ टल्किन्छौ किन ?
Bali Ji…!
I am very happy to get chance to read your creation…
i heartly welcome YOU ….
expecting MORE…..keep it UP!!
Thanks for your good comments .You are welcome.
तपाईंको गजल पढे राम्रो लागो। लेख्दै जानुहोल निरन्तर्ताको कामना गर्छु।
Sabin ji ! i appreciates your kind comments. thanks.
Baliji,
I am realy proud of you to get a gazal in such rhythm. It is outstanding creation. Independent lines are even mindblowing and fantastic. Satire is put on at the right earnest. I m speechless buddy.
It would have been more facinating,if you had included ‘Takhalus’ on the lines some where. Emerge even more underneath of thoughts to reconize yourself that you can write a masterpiece gazal. May god bless you.
Pardeshi Tara ( Tara Tiwari) from Buffalo, NY, USA
Pardesi taraji . G’day ! I warmly give u lots of Thanks 4 giving me outstanding comments. I appreciate that creation is always with us wherever we go.So , we love it. Thanks once again.