गजल-२३
शेरु ‘उदास’ राई
शनिश्चरे, मोरङ्ग
सानो हुँदा आमा सधैँ जूनको कथा भन्नु हुन्थ्यो
सहिदले बगाएको खुनको कथा भन्नु हुन्थ्यो
भनेको चीज नपाएमा ठुस्की झर्की रिसाएमा
खुशी पार्न बाँसुरी र धुनको कथा भन्नु हुन्थ्यो
कहिले काहीँ झुल्न लाग्दा कहिले सुत्न लाग्दा
ढाकरेको तोक्मा अनि नुनको कथा भन्नु हुन्थ्यो
कुनै देशको जङ्गलबिच मदन बिराम पर्दा खेरी
भोटे दाइले लगाएको गुनको कथा भन्नु हुन्थ्यो
उदासजी गजल उदास छैनहै । निरन्तरताको शुभकामना ।
Hi Seru, How have you been doing these days?
Your pen has power of writing and let it not be down. Keep on writing till the ink remains. Bring this type of masterpiece gazal and other write-ups in the international literary scenerio. One day other, you will be saluted and rewarded for your creations. Moreover, it will be written in golden latters. Congratulation !
To say,- this gazal is rhythemic,emotional, touche,simple and has sweet tone. Independent lines are very weighty. Kafya too is exectly related with independent lines which every gazal has to have. I appreciate you Seru very much. I also would like to Thank whole heartedly to @ http://www.bhutaneseliterature.com for publishing this gazal.
Seru, where are you in these days? When I saw your gazal and picture here in the site, I remembered my days in Dhorphirdi, Dulegauda, Gagangauda, Pokhara. I remembered the initial time of my literary work and wished to visit again but I couldn’t. I could only view far from the horizon.
Thank you
Pardeshitara (TT)
Buffalo,NY,USA
Plz do write me in my id pardeshitara@yahoo.com